The following section presents excerpts from an Executive Summary of a Final Technical Report on a new conference registration system created by a software development team in Qatar. The developers believe that the innovative features of their new system make it superior to its competitors. However, their clients (the Qatar National Convention Center) did not find the Executive Summary and Report convincing enough. In the challenges that follow, try to consider the options presented so that the developers can make the most effective case for their audience.

Directions: Identify and improve text that can make the report more effective, in terms of its parallelism, coherence, and concision.

Challenge 2: Being Consistent

Your Goal

Making related parts of the text consistent

Prallelism Example

Less Parallel

Here, you not only can learn the goal of Parallelism, but also how to check the response option you are choosing.

More Parallel

Here, you not only can learn the goal of Parallelism, but also some comments on each activity’s response options.

Less Parallel

How to UseParallelism in this Challenge

Reading Examples of the Skill

CheckingResponse Options

More Parallel

Using Parallelism in this Challenge

ReadingExamples of the Skill

CheckingResponse Options

Comments on Response Options

Problem Text

Our client requested that our system include more functions that would upgrade it. We managed to add these use cases, despite previous concerns about meeting our deadline and handle code defects discovered earlier.

Option A

“meeting our deadline and handling code defects”

This option uses consistent action words such as “meeting” and “handling.”

Option B

“planning to meet our deadline and handling code defects”

This option pairs two action words, “planning” with “handling,” but the “planning” portion is really the phrase, “planning to meet,” which is not consistent with the word “handling” alone.”

Option C

“meeting our deadline and code defects”

Unlike the first two options, this pairs an action word with a thing: “meeting” with “code defects”; therefore, these two related words are not consistent.