The following presents excerpts from a Technical Components section of a Final Technical Report on a new conference registration system created by a software development team in Qatar. The developers believe that the innovative features of their new system make it superior to its competitors. However, their clients (the Qatar National Convention Center) did not find the Executive Summary and Report convincing enough. In the challenges that follow, try to consider the options presented so that the developers can make the most effective case for their audience.

Directions: Identify and improve text that can make the report more effective, in terms of its parallelism, coherence, and concision.

Challenge 1: Being Consistent

Your Goal

making related parts of the text consistent

Less Parallel

Here, you not only can learn the goal of Parallelism, but also how to check the response option you are choosing.

More Parallel

Here, you not only can learn the goal of Parallelism, but also some comments on each activity’s response options.

Less Parallel

How to UseParallelism in this Challenge

Reading Examples of the Skill

CheckingResponse Options

More Parallel

Using Parallelism in this Challenge

ReadingExamples of the Skill

CheckingResponse Options

Comments on Response Options

Problem Text

GemTypes:
1. Sqlite 3 Gem: While developing and testing our system, we used “SQlite 3” as the standard database.

2. pg Gem: We used the “pg” gem in the production stage.

Option A

“While making our product available to customers, we used the “pg” gem because Heroku supports PostgreSQL RDBMS.”

This option follows the “While making” structure to form “While developing,” parallel both to “while” and the “-ing” form of the verb (“making,” “developing”).

Option B

“During the production stage, we used the “pg” gem because Heroku supports PostgreSQL RDMS.”

This option also follows the sequencing of the “While making” structure by placing the project’s stage first. But the project’s stage is worded as a thing, “producing stage” and not as an action like “While making” in the previous structure.Something more consistent could be “While Producing, etc.”

Option C

“We used the “pg” gem in the production stage because Heroku supports PostgreSQL.”

This option, unlike the first two options, does not follow the sequencing of the “While making” structure, and places the project’s stage later: “We used...in the production stage.” Like the previous option, the wording of the project’s stage is not consistent with the “While making” structure because it is again worded as a thing rather than an action.